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Originally posted by Ginger
What I meant was that they used it so often, it became distracting.
"I got out of bed" he said. "I took a shower and brushed my teeth" he said. John Doe then began his morning commute to work. "The engine wasn't sounding right from the get-go" said Doe. "I later discovered the neighbour boy (Smith) had put sugar in my gas tank" he said.
See what I mean?
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I see. It should be:
"I got out of bed," he said. "I took a shower and brushed my teeth."
John Doe then began his morning commute to work. "The engine wasn't sounding right from the get-go," Doe said. "I later discovered the neighbour boy (Smith) had put sugar in my gas tank."
The above flows better -- the NPHC story could have used a better copy editor.
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