Check out my Pilot: FraTv

[Smitty4T7]

Hey guys, so I made this PILOT for a YouTube series a while back.
It's been unlisted on YouTube for a while but I want ppl to see it now cause I'm revisiting the idea. I'd love your feedback and PLEASE REMEMBER it's a PILOT, it isn't gunna be perfect lol

Hope you guys enjoy!

FraTv

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_O0iN...layer_embedded

[FHwku]

i'm not sure what that's supposed to be. but it ain't good.

[Smitty4T7]

lol Thats incredibly constructive... dumbass.
>_>

Its not very helpful just to say you didnt like it. Why, outside of encoding problems and video quality?
As for what it is... All the videos are just random videos I shot with my flip cam or phone, one day I was just chillin with a couple of my bros and we got the idea to edit them together, and make some sort of narrative out of it.

Im starting a production company and we're deciding which projects to scrap and which ones to run with. The style I want this show to be will be something inspired by a few of my favorite series: Blue Mt State, Greek, Dorm Life, and The Office. Ive shared FraTv with a good handful of friends, or friends of friends and for the most part they all liked it, but most of them also knew ppl in the video. So Im looking for feedback outside of my social circles.

[Cen1aur 1963]

Originally Posted by Smitty4T7

lol Thats incredibly constructive... dumbass

LOL

[LaneSig]

Originally Posted by Smitty4T7

lol Thats incredibly constructive... dumbass.
>_>

Its not very helpful just to say you didnt like it. Why, outside of encoding problems and video quality?
As for what it is... All the videos are just random videos I shot with my flip cam or phone, one day I was just chillin with a couple of my bros and we got the idea to edit them together, and make some sort of narrative out of it.

Im starting a production company and we're deciding which projects to scrap and which ones to run with. The style I want this show to be will be something inspired by a few of my favorite series: Blue Mt State, Greek, Dorm Life, and The Office. Ive shared FraTv with a good handful of friends, or friends of friends and for the most part they all liked it, but most of them also knew ppl in the video. So Im looking for feedback outside of my social circles.

Okay, I'll bite.

"The style I want this show to be will be something inspired by a few of my favorite series: Blue Mt State, Greek, Dorm Life, and The Office."

After watching your show, I can say the difference between your show and the ones named is that they all have a plot. And people you want to know more about. Your show was just flash fiction or vignettes: "Here's where we wrote on our friend's car." As a viewer: Why did you write on the car? Is this an ongoing joke? If it is, it means nothing to me. I'm not a friend in on the joke. I don't know anything about the people who did it. It's a meaningless prank that got put on youtube.

Why is the girl dancing? Why is she trying to teach the guy how to shake his butt and thrust it? Can he not dance? Is that the premise? It's just a bunch of people in a dorm room watching someone - who we don't know and have no connection to - dance. There are 100s of videos like it out there.

In all honesty, it looks like an attempt at "Jackass", without the fun. It just looks like a video of a bunch of non-connected videos. There isn't anything to bring the viewer into or to connect to the action.

Is that the critique you are looking for?

[Smitty4T7]

Originally Posted by LaneSig

Is that the critique you are looking for?

Yes it is.
That was very helpful, everything you said made sense.
Like I said though, these are random videos that I cut together. This Pilot is not exactly reflective of the final product I intended to create, it is merely a concept. How at all would I be able to make a plot from random videos I shot of my friends and I doing stupid shit? Ya kno. But I had the idea and didnt wanna forget it so I trew this together.

The point was to show an idea, or premise. This show will have drunk antics, video games, vlogging, music performances, and you might learn a thing or two as well (geo cashing bit).
I think that makes sense. Please share it with your friends and org members.

If we decide to move fwd with this project the show will have much more focus, a real narrative, and actual characters obviously.