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Originally Posted by shawnabo
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So, I assume you're the author, or at least involved with the site. So here's some advice:
-It doesn't make sense. There's no "flow", no narrative at all. It's not funny - not simply because it's not clever, but because it doesn't build. Comedy is an art - you should read up on the theory of comedy and try to use it, because right now, you're throwing shit (usually repetition or non sequiturs) against the wall. It doesn't stick.
-The 'definition' of "Fratty" is pretty silly, and not really at all what I would consider "correct" in any way. Why would you try to extend the definition to fit some massive section of the population? Why go out of your way to include people not in greek orgs or whatever? Fratty is more than drinking. Fratty is less than a lifestyle. Precision is your friend. Also, constraints breed creativity - your shit will get funnier the more you restrict the definition. Again, you'd know this if you read a book or something.
-The structure sucks. A bunch of outline-style lists? Really?
-I don't really see the Tucker Max comparisons, for a multitude of reasons. Say what you will about Max, but he has a voice - this has no unique voice at all. As such, it comes across as derivative.
So yeah - you asked, dude.
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