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Originally posted by exlurker
Wow. The story would have benefitted from editing before publication. I have no problem with a minor typo or two, but this story needs help.
"Sigma Chi house verses the Sigma Pi" -- "versus"
"there freshmen year dorm experience" -- their" and "freshman"
"your closets friends" -- "closest"
"makes there house easy" -- "their"
"On the quality of their other hand, the location of their fraternity houses does not effect the brotherhood." -- "affect," not "effect," and "quality of their" should be moved immediately before "brotherhood."
A couple of unidiomatic usages could be revised:
"in proximity with" -- "in proximity to"
"Sigma Chi house is also neighboring to the William T. Young Library" -- probably " . . . is also near the William . . .," unless "neighboring to" is a well-known Kentucky regionalism.
Cliches don't make it any better, either:
"preconceived notion"
"positive factor"
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Glad to see I'm not the only one who picked up on that...