Not in a sorority so I can't say what sororities want to hear or not...but using logic I can give advice.
Just saying from my perspective your answer sounds robotic and TMI. I know I'm a PNM but since no one has given feedback I'll give you feedback.
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Well, I know you guys are really focused on women and children with your philanthropy, which is one of the reasons I decided to rush,
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This sounds fine. A lot of women join sororities to get involved with philanthropy.
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and I feel like I can be a good example of a balanced woman (their motto).
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Um...they don't know you & you can't back it up. Sounds too try hard for me. You're like pretending to be one of them but you're not? It's like I wouldn't go to recruitment color coordinated outfits for each house based on their sorority colors...that's too try hard.
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I have experienced firsthand a form of dating violence, which was emotional abuse, and
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TMI. Seems like you've been through a lot, but I wouldn't bring it up during recruitment.
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I know you guys work a lot with the RAINN (Rape, Abuse, Incest National Network) center, which I think is really great.
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Sounds okay. I'd combine this with point #1.
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I feel like the experience that I have had with emotional abuse can contribute in a way toward the New Member Education in the long run if I were to receive a bid.
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WHAT? :eek: Um...again, too try hard and arrogant. Sounds very plastic like the balanced woman comment.
I'd say this is what to keep:
"I'm really interested in women's and children's issues and I know you guys are really focused on women and children with your philanthropies. For example the work you do with the RAINN (Rape, Abuse, Incest National Network) center, I think is really great and was one of the reasons that attracted me to your sorority."
Do you want sisterhood? Do you want friends?
Girls join join sororities to find friends/sisters first and foremost. That's what my IRL sister who is a sorority "sister" said and why I wanna join. You need to bring out a more natural YOU and not sound so robotic.
Without wanting the social aspects of the org...anything you want can be filled by the women's center on campus or volunteering for orgs like RAINN yourself. Sisterhood and friendship is sets sororities apart from other orgs. Since that wasn't part of your answer maybe you don't want it? If you don't want sisterhood and friendship...do other things! If you want it then focus your answer on it because that's really the only legit reason I see to join.
And if you don't seem like a girl they wanna be friends with...you won't get a bid. I say be more natural. It'll be way less awk than what you wrote there.